The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
The newsletter states that engaging undergraduate and graduate students in community services would help them gain real-world working experience and would also help local charities at the same time. The assumption made over here is lacking concrete evidence since engaging in charity work won't necessarily help students since there can be many discrepancies while they would be a part of it.
Firstly, the argument has a vague description of the real-world working experience since there is no proper understanding of what kind of role would be provided by the local charities as well as it's not necessary that they would give them some work where they would have to deal with the clients or have to collect people for the work. This shows how they would lack in providing the students with real-world experience as the role provided to them may vary.
Secondly, the argument doesn't take the students mood into consideration as there would be some of them who would just do the work for completing the graduation since it's necessary for them and this would lead to a lack of enthusiasm and concern which can affect the charities progress at the same time.
Moreover, It's not necessary that all the students can get work in the charities since they didn't mention the number of seats available or the number of charities that would be willing to work with them which would leave some of the students with no work and can affect their graduation.
All in all, there are many factors which are not been considered while making the assumption since it's not necessary that every student would be willing to do the work with full energy, at the same time this would not necessarily help them with the kind of experience the university is trying to provide them.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1445 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.753 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.211 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.561 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.861 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.386 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hem may vary. Secondly, the argument doesnt take the students mood into considerati...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... Secondly, the argument doesnt take the students mood into consideration as there would ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...an get work in the charities since they didnt mention the number of seats available o...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ing to work with them which would leave some of the students with no work and can affect th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87043189369 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5589074224 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435215946844 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 442.8 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.8529410553 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 209.428571429 119.503703932 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.0 23.324526521 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8571428571 5.70786347227 243% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0930583566139 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580840175889 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352953703781 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653916836289 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283848762716 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 14.3799401198 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.197005988 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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