Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The continuity of working after the age of retirement is always a hot-debated topic that has many different opinions. While, from my point of view, I agree that the elderly should enjoy their old age without working, I believe that they can maintain their career no matter how old they are.
On the other hand, the employment opportunities in this day and age are extremely limited so it should be given for young people, who are and will be the future of the countries. There are thousands of students graduating from universities over the world every day, giving rise to the demand for jobs and careers. However, companies and enterprises cannot create thousands of new position in their business, especially when the senior generation still maintain their own works. This is true of developing countries in general and Vietnam in particular, in which university bachelors or even young masters could not find any employment suitable for their levels and degrees.
On the one hand, the experience and the wisdom of the senior generation is the treasure for young people to counsel. By dint of real-life experiences accumulated from the past, the senior leaders may help young businessmen to run their business more efficiently and effectively. That is the reason why retired people can maintain their own position in the organizations though there is no shortage of young talent. By way of illustration, Warren Buffet currently reaches the age of ninety but he still works harder and harder on a daily basis. In addition, several countries which have high percentages of old citizens such as Japan, Germany, and Italy, you name it, do not have enough young labors, so the retired people have to stay in their works until they cannot do anymore.
In conclusion, while the unemployment rate can affect the policy of retirement, I individually do not believe that age is a considerable factor outweighing others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... is always a hot-debated topic that has many different opinions. While, from my point of view,...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...so it should be given for young people, who are and will be the future of the countries...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06624605678 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8020077445 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583596214511 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.4201993145 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24639661649 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774485314859 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566702425209 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139951741702 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741832465029 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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