In countries where there is a high rate of unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world of industrialization and globalization, going to school is certainly a crucial stage in people’s life. In some developing countries, many people argue that children should only finish primary school and then go to work, secondary education is unnecessary since most secondary students have no chance of finding a job. From my point of view, I completely disagree with the statement since I believe that even though having a job can bring some benefits, in long term, education plays an irreplaceable role.
On the one hand, I concur that there are some advantages when pupils have a job early, especially in undeveloped countries. Firstly, it is true that in these countries, everything that people may dream about is just what to eat, where to live,… thus, parents might not care to send their kids to secondary school, it is simply a risk. Instead, they let them work so that the whole family can fulfill that simple dream together. Secondly, the education system may not be good enough to offer children many opportunities for developing and socializing in the best way possible. Besides, many jobs here may not require any specialized knowledge or professionally trained workers, thus, children do not need to complete higher education.
On the other hand, I am more convinced that letting children join the workforce without providing them with secondary education will bring tremendous negative effects on individuals and society. Firstly, it is scientifically proved that exposure to heavy works for a long time will cause negative impacts on people’s health, especially for adolescents such as injuries, spinal problems,… therefore, the future of the country is basically not in a safe hand. Secondly, in long term, education is always the best way to develop not only individuals but also society. Taking Japan as a prime example, a country with no natural resources and earthquakes happen on a daily basis but thank an advanced education system, Japan is now among the most developed country on Earth.
In conclusion, although there are some short term benefits when pupils are encouraged to have a job, I truly believe that provide them with sufficient guidance and education is the most effective way to better their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17166212534 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90735567138 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58038147139 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.1799129995 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2307692308 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252259090458 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794512279363 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656951463043 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143650943218 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432614371153 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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