The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the
best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity become a major problem in recent decade.Some people claim that this burning issues has a harmful effect on health care system so one part reckon that by introducing physical lessons in school syllabus is main remedies.In my opinion learning from childhood can be a solution but not best way.A number of arguments support my opinion.
Though , many people think initiating physical study from beginning stage of personal life will completely reduced overweight it is not true all time.Sometimes young children can not understand or can not carry their learning through life.they often fail to execute their education in later life owing to different circumstances.For example, young people fond of cycling but as they become adult they can not continue this habit due to lack of time.So it is clear that school learning could be a good step but not the best one.
On the other hand, we are now living in a technological era that's why most of the work is machine oriented.Due to this reason,people sit back hour after hour in front of computer or laptop.lack of exercise they face various health concern.Furthermore,social networking,you tubing, gaming on-screen increase the chance to become lazy.However,for solving this problem technology should be used up to a certain limit at the same time regular exercise should continue routine base.
In addition, present days people especially young generation very much addicted to fast food or junk food .these types food has low nutritive below which has adverse effect on body mechanism.Resarch shows that, junk food contain 30% fatty acid,65% cholesterol that is alarming component.so home-made balance diet is highly recommended for ensuring safe health.
At the end of the day, presenting more physical lesson in school curriculum can be beneficial but other reason should be considered.Balanced died,home made healthy food ,routine exercise all are linked together for maintain
weight.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in addition, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3954248366 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22587089591 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 20.2975951904 301% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.966533077 49.4020404114 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 330.2 106.682146367 310% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.2 20.7667163134 295% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.6 7.06120827912 263% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181116364096 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949203273898 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651920882435 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950658256334 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065080704006 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.6 13.0946893788 264% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.1 50.2224549098 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 11.3001002004 250% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.1190380762 261% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.