The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education in the school curriculum.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Thanks to the improvement of quality of life, more people can live in the lap of luxury. That is the main reason for the growing number of overweight people putting a pressure on the health care system due to the rising health issues faced by the public. Therefore, focusing on physical educations lessons in school curriculum is common solution given by people. Accordingly, I partially agree with this popular way of dealing with overweight can be effective.
First, school is an ideal place to promote physical and healthy habits among children. By inserting these lessons between academic subjects, children could be encouraged to engage in active activities, which can prevent obesity and other health issues. Furthermore, these lessons can help them to develop essential skills such as teamwork and leadership can be benefit for their future.
On the other hand, we cannot expect schools to effectively manage the healthcare of millions of students with individual needs and lifestyle choices. Parents and the public also play as significant roles in encouraging children to follow a healthy lifestyle. Therefore, a comprehensive approach that involves the collaborations between schools, families, communities, and students is essential to tackle this issue.
In conclusion, weigh up both sides, I would say that although the provision of physical lessons in academic programs can have certain positive impacts on societies for dealing with the increasing obesity among the youths but the drawbacks that it brings to the community are impossible to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44672131148 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85900828601 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627049180328 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8450118471 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.818181818 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1818181818 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283155868823 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941474013919 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932342478499 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156157907315 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153650261963 0.056905535591 270% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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