You went to the local hospital's emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the registrar, complaining about the service you received.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to draw your attention to the poor service delivery to the patients visiting in your hospital's emergency department.
I had been there due to illness of my daughter, who was suffering from severe diarrhea and vomiting last night. we have tried to give her first aid at home. Her deteriorating health condition impelled us to go to the nearby hospital. we arrived at 8:00 p.m in the A&E, unfortunately no-one came to see my her until 12:00 am.
I was intermittently contacting to the Reception and Nursing staff, but they were not giving her proper attention and care to the matter.
I was really disappointed by their behaviour and shouted to attend her as she was drained completely due to severe vomitting. while listening my daughter's screams, a doctor came out from the staff room after 4 hours and attended my patient. The doctor prescribed some medicines to bring it from pharmacy and then she started treatment. we have never had an experience like that before, we were quite distressed as no-one was bothering.
I would like to take a notice of this unlawful and unethical behaviour of your staff. I am provinding you the admission and discharge slip of my daughter.
Please look into this matter unless patents stop visiting you!
Regards
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y noone came to see my her until 1200 am I was intermittently contacting to the R...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...termittently contacting to the Reception and Nursing staff but they were not givi...
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Line 6, column 429, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... quite distressed as noone was bothering I would like to take a notice of this un...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'regard'
Suggestion: Regard
...atter unless patents stop visiting you Regards
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, really, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1045.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79357798165 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73173129394 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633027522936 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 218.0 16.3608247423 1332% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1045.0 76.5299724578 1365% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 218.0 16.8248392259 1296% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 41.0 4.34317383033 944% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 7.41237113402 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209096963335 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209096963335 0.0766984524023 273% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100766324987 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312373895126 0.0580467560999 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 110.1 8.37731958763 1314% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -141.33 70.7449484536 -200% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 87.1 7.45979381443 1168% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.71 7.59969072165 233% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 8.62886597938 649% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 89.2 8.54432989691 1044% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 18.0 8.15463917526 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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