In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In same societies, children are advised saying that they can achieve anything if they workhard. There is a common saying "Every coin has two sides" so, definitely there will be advantages and disadvantages. Let us discuss the pros and cons of this statement briefly.
Firstly, I would discuss the advantages of the above notion. Personally what I feel is that the children should be encouraged by their parents or teachers so that they can boost themselves and learn to rectify their mistakes. If you castigate them, the children might get disappointed and will definitely get discouraged. So, we need to make children understand that they can achieve anything in this world by doing hard work.Unless a person tries to work hard to achieve the target, it will become an arduous task for him to succeed. The positivity in children can be build up with the help of parents and teachers.As they are the ones who can make him believe in himself that he has the potential to work hard. For instance, let us consider a scenario where a student has scored less marks in a subject. Now, he has worked hard but has the fear to re-write the exam thinking that he might score less marks again. Here if his parents or teachers cheers him up, he can overcome his fear and can attempt the exam in a successful way.
In contrast to, let us talk about the disadvantages about the notion. In my ideology, the children should not be pressurized with regard to studies.Though, there might be children who can cope up things in a faster manner, but there are few who are quite slow. For this kind of children we should never pressurize them. Let them take their own time to workhard.In addition to it, there are also few children who take things seriously. They workhard in a such a way that they do not take care of their health. This leads to plethora of health issues in children.
We all know that "Health is Wealth", if health does not support us then it will become an onerous for us to achieve the target.
Finally, I would say that never force the children to do the task. Let them do on their own.
- Many people think that students should be allowed to choose the subjects that they study in school whereas others feel that they should study a set curriculum 67
- The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002 The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make com 86
- In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement 56
- The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station 67
- Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[1]
Message: Verbs 'advise' and 'remind' are used with infinitive: 'to say'.
Suggestion: to say
...In same societies, children are advised saying that they can achieve anything if they ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 426, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Unless
...ything in this world by doing hard work.Unless a person tries to work hard to achieve ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...p with the help of parents and teachers.As they are the ones who can make him beli...
^^
Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...p with the help of parents and teachers.As they are the ones who can make him beli...
^^
Line 2, column 781, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun marks is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...r a scenario where a student has scored less marks in a subject. Now, he has worked ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 897, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun marks is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e the exam thinking that he might score less marks again. Here if his parents or tea...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1012, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a successful way" with adverb for "successful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rcome his fear and can attempt the exam in a successful way. In contrast to, let us talk about the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
...t be pressurized with regard to studies.Though, there might be children who can cope u...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...et them take their own time to workhard.In addition to it, there are also few chil...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then, for instance, i feel, in addition, in contrast, kind of, in contrast to, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63466666667 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65800727363 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493333333333 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2831360609 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310436943804 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945042809553 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899390298989 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152846698639 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962322387161 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.