WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system Sum

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WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task
The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British
prison system.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant
Write at least 150 words

Given are two figures concerning criminality in Britain. The first provides data on the rates of conviction among men and women of various ages, while the second indicates the gender balance of
the UK prison population.
It is apparent from the information supplied that the rate of conviction among Brits of both sexes increases exponentially during adolescence and peaks at the age of about 20. Also evident is the fact that men are far more likely to offend than women. From a negligible 2 percent among 10-year-old boys, the male conviction rate soars to approximately 16 percent among 20-year-olds. The percentage of female offenders, meanwhile, climbs from 0 percent among girls of 10 to some 5 percent for 20-year-olds. The subsequent decades, however, see dramatic decreases in criminality among both sexes. A mere 2 percent of crimes are committed by 60-year-old men and 0 percent by women of the same age.
As for the proportion of male and female prison inmates, men outnumber women 24 to 1. Some 96 percent of all prisoners are men, while the remainder is female.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e second indicates the gender balance of the UK prison population. It is apparen...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...cence and peaks at the age of about 20. Also evident is the fact that men are far mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, so, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 900.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95691280449 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9267715473 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277704555354 0.215688989381 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113954510172 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572149972805 0.0843802449381 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185261741942 0.15604864568 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202474371848 0.0819641961636 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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