In this technological era, personal information is held on computers by many companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Along with the rapid development of technology, new practices such as storing user's personal data online by conglomerates has been a controversial topic. While some claim that this practices brings benefits for both users and companies, some argue that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages associated with it.
On one hand, the art of maintaining a system to gather and store personal information is beneficial in certain aspects. First and foremost, it would be easier for enterprises to meet customer's need since all the data about them is available online, better products would be made to satisfy individual demand. In addition, online transitions would be faster than ever, especially people who have electronic wallet which save them a lot of time and effort since they do not have to bring cash to pay for their purchase anymore. Users have the flexibility in choosing product, such as the ability to order and pay for services or products at home with simple and easy steps. For example, users can stay at home during the pandemic and order commodities, then their purchase history is stored on the system and when they reach a specific payment goal they get a discount or a gift.
On the other hand, I am with those who advocates that keeping personal data is a detrimental practice . One obvious disadvantage is that big companies which hold a massive source of personal information could sell it to advertisement agencies. Then these agencies would bombard users with continuous commercials whenever they are online which is disturbing and forces users to twitch to new devices. Moreover, despite the convenient of credit card, online wallet which contain valuable personal data could be stolen in a matter of seconds if users were not paying attention. Hackers would illegally withdraw money from their victim's bank account and leave them in debt or force them to do what they said in order to have their data back
In sum, although the advantages of holding personal data is undeniable, the drawbacks associated with it is worth considering. Especially in the modern day, when it is easy to access other's information, not only for good purpose such as provide convenient, save people's time but also bad purpose like scamming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06756756757 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71152599153 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578378378378 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2958073172 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.230769231 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4615384615 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980120057974 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410879670571 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476827418431 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0662984157429 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309356007066 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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