Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Gossips and scandals are always the most popular news in magazines and other medias. Since it can bring a lot of readers to the media, more and more media have pupperaze today. However, I believe that those famous celebrities care about their privacy as much as us. Therefore, I agree with the statement that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
To begin with, it is true that being celebrities requires people to give up certain level of privacy. Since they are enjoying the benefits of being under the spotlight, their behaviors would draw more attention from societies. Let's take Justin Bibber as example. He became famous when he was just a teenager, these fames had brought him considerable amount of money. And according to empirical evidence, when people are rich, their behaviors would change. So it is not surprised that people became curious to his personal life.
However, famous celebrities are just like us, they are still human. And we have been fighting for privacy for decades, which can indicate how much we care about privacy. Thus, losing privacy could cause some negative effects too. For example, Justin Bibber again. During the period that medias kept exposing his private life, his behaviors became more and more abnormal. Though a lot of people attributed it to his wealth, what I saw was they truly disturbed his personal life, which made him started acting abnormally. And few years later, when he is not as famous as before, I can tell that he had turned back to normal again. Hence, maybe the violation of privacy was the real reason that his behaviors was getting out of control.
Moreover, despite some people may argue that some celebrities violated their own privacy deliberately in exchange for fame like Kim Kardashian, since it is the easiest way to be famous. Nevertheless, it does not mean that all famous people are like that. I believe most celebrities earned their fame through their own skills. Therefore, in my point of view, they deserve to have more privacy.
To sum up, though celebrities' gossips and scandals are always interesting, we still have to keep some privacy for them. Or they may have more physical and mental issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, it is true, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.952 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44890034278 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525333333333 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1548760143 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.375 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45833333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237380064634 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072526462934 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12374385215 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155901798496 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112371749544 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.