in some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving \\children this message.
The motivating phrase which is frequently listened by children is “work hard”. Almost all the older people use those words to trigger children if they want to acquire something. However, there are serious problems in psychology if kids listen that for a long time. However, I personally believe that the phrase, work hard, is crucial for children.
The message of work hard is able to build strong mentality for children when they grow up. It is because when they desire to get something, they make extra efforts and are hard to give up while finding obstacles. For example, a kid wants to be a police in the future. He will be serious in learning and solves a simple problem which makes him more likely to be successful person. When getting adult, he has been ready to experience many problems and try to find any solutions to fix the problems. Furthermore, the message can be used to entertain children when they get failed in schools so that the children’s mental state is still better.
Nevertheless, not all children are able to interpret the meaning of work hard well. Instead of searching the effective way to obtain something, they prefer to use their muscle or physical strength. The long-term impact is the children are unable to think creatively and critically. As a result, they do not know how to solve the problems and are easy to quit. Additionally, as getting failed, they just blame the conditions or other people, whereas they even do not make more efforts.
To sum up, motivating kids by saying try hard is beneficial in spite of the fact that there are drawbacks as well. To make it balance, children should be taught work hard without ignoring work smartly.
- Rich countries often give money to poorer countries but it does not solve poverty Therefore developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid To what extent do you agree or disagree 67
- You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The illustrations show how chocolate is produced Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words 11
- in some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message 61
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, whereas, while, for example, as a result, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80756013746 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60050510467 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573883161512 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.7998127036 49.4020404114 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.2941176471 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1176470588 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277690839366 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939381835153 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660404993881 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170708230412 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404478685058 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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