Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Sentiments diverge on whether parents make a preparation about the future for their kids by motivating them to take part in the part-time job. Although some formidably cencure this stance since it distracts their children from studying, I am in opposition owing to some rational reasons.
To begin with, part-time jobs allow young people to be more experience which helps them become more mature. To be more accurate, running for money during studying time will prepare them with firm skills to deal with the future job as working will let people know their own weakness to reinforce. Moreover, people will make some mistakes in the working process which support them to recognize the missing in their working skills. For example, working as an waiter sometimes will pour a cup of water to the customer and receive an negative feedback. Thus, people will know how to work under pressure and become more patient when getting the diatribe.
Futher and more importantly, children have cognition regarding the value of money through their working time. The myriad number of work is offered with mediorce salary which let people understand how hard it is to get money. Therefore, in the future career, children have to appreciate money that they accumulate from working resulting in the chance to control financial condition and ability to expenditure money in a reasonable way. As a result, those factors will support children with efficient life. Taking my sister for example, at first she worked spanking hard for living. Hence, she instilled the power of money, thereafter she tried to save money and studying about things relating to augment money for the grandiose purpose which contributed to her success up to date.
In the end, encouraging their own children for working part-time job at an particular age is a great opportunity for youngsters to hone skills and deeply understand the value of money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...working skills. For example, working as an waiter sometimes will pour a cup of wat...
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Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put between 'will' and 'pour'.
Suggestion: will sometimes pour
...ills. For example, working as an waiter sometimes will pour a cup of water to the customer and rece...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...up of water to the customer and receive an negative feedback. Thus, people will kn...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a reasonable way" with adverb for "reasonable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...dition and ability to expenditure money in a reasonable way. As a result, those factors will suppor...
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Suggestion: a
...n children for working part-time job at an particular age is a great opportunity f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12779552716 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55180180934 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562300319489 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0986646888 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.642857143 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217053325495 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868461877399 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686054726824 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151149640695 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316272173365 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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