It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job rather than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents.
Recently, there has been a ton of debate on what job children should stick to.I personally, believe that kids should practice the same profession as their parents.I feel this way for several reasons, which i will explore in my body paragraphs.
First and foremost,kids that practice the same skills as their parents are more likely to gain more experience.To be more specific, their horizon will be broadened, because they can always get to understand things better with the help of their parents due to the fact their parents have once been in their shoes.My neighbour is a clear illustration of this.She major into nursing because her mum has always been her role model.So whenever she experience difficulties with any of her practical classes, she will always consult her mum, and with this she never had the inanity to give up on the nursing career.Besides,this really pave the way for her because she did not only graduate with a distinction, but also get a well paid job in a well known hospital.If she hadn't chosen her mums profession,there is high probability that she might come encounter a lot of challenges with a different profession.
Furthermore, children that practice the same profession as their parents will always ensure continuity of the business after the demise of any of their parents.In fact, they can always add up new innovations to ensure the survival of the business.Drawing from my own examples.My mum is a pharmacist that has been practising for ten years. So because of the love I have for her I was thrilled to take up pharmacy as a career.So a few days after I gained admission to the University I lost her to the cold hands of death.With this, I became motivated and promised to ensure that her community pharmacy continues to grow.I was able to remodify the pharmacy and people never regretted patronizing us.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that kids should always have the same job with their parents.This is because it makes their studies perfectly smooth, and because there will always be business continuity even after their parents are no longer existing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, well, i feel, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97752808989 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93458539499 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519662921348 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.1344086022 353% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 244.341564209 48.9658058833 499% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 354.4 100.406767564 353% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.2 20.6045352989 346% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.4 5.45110844103 283% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.5376344086 524% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211687922929 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126995165804 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614181013105 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144954269173 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361607923164 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.6 11.7677419355 320% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.87 58.1214874552 14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.8 10.1575268817 293% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.79 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.0537634409 302% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.247311828 293% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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