The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares different recreational activities of American elders from 1980 and 2010
Overall, all types of activity followed an upward trend. They were also seen with fluctuations, except for hiking
In 1980s, only 20% of old people went hiking, however, this portion then experienced a consistent surge, overtaking the first position of watching television and peaked at 80% in 2010s. From 1980s to 2000s, both watching TV and surfing the Internet witnessed a gradual rise of about 10% to 70% and 15%, respectively. Nonetheless, while the figure for TV dropped slightly to about 65% in the final decade, that of browsing the web soared up to 50%.
Theatre was a free time activity chosen by half of the elderly people living in the USA, which was 20% more than that of reading in 1980s. However, these people then lost interest in the theatre when its percentage declined significantly to only 30% in 1990s, as opposed to reading, which saw a 40% growth in the same period. Afterwards, while theatre was seen with a steady rise to 45%, reading rocketed to 60% in 2010s after a 20% decrease
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1980s'.
Suggestion: In the 1980s
...n with fluctuations, except for hiking In 1980s, only 20% of old people went hiking, ho...
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...f watching television and peaked at 80% in 2010s. From 1980s to 2000s, both watching TV ...
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Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
...which was 20% more than that of reading in 1980s. However, these people then lost intere...
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Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...tage declined significantly to only 30% in 1990s, as opposed to reading, which saw a 40%...
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Line 4, column 412, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...dy rise to 45%, reading rocketed to 60% in 2010s after a 20% decrease
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, then, while, except for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 919.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86243386243 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63862598311 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.1160627036 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.285714286 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.23603664747 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0772948385037 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337036927792 0.103423049105 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415522029057 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.053730222095 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550824593355 0.0819641961636 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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