The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more healthy diets at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Health system could be hampered since many obesity people. I agree that introduce healthier diet is the best method to handle the issue, but the passion and the environment is the most influence factor.
Nowadays, people have a tendency not to eat health cuisine, they prefer to eat junk food because it is accessible and cheaper, then it could impact for their health. Their life style provide problem such as obesity, stroke and heart disease, then it is triggered many people to becomes ill, so the massive influx patient in the hospital might be create a problem to health system in the country. Putting more simply, if many people tend to consumes healthy diets, then the issues could be resolved. For example, people have an obligation to eat vegetables and milk in their daily activities.
On the other hand, introduce healthy food is not the only solution, because the people desire and the environment are the main factor. To put it simply, if the health expert gives an explanation about the importance of healthy cuisine for people, but the people have no ambition to minimize it, it still could be a matter. The second is the family, friends, and co-worker environment, because people lives in society, so the habit cannot be convert without changes society itself. For example, based on research in Senior High School in Jakarta, all people wanting to be a health person, they have to be gathered in one community.
In conclusion, consume healthy food is one of solution to repair health system in the country, but the most important factors are from people itself such as community and affection, where possible the government should make a law to limit junk food consummation to create a good health system.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...se, then it is triggered many people to becomes ill, so the massive influx patient in t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'consume'.
Suggestion: consume
...ing more simply, if many people tend to consumes healthy diets, then the issues could be...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93150684932 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5105893203 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544520547945 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1249075028 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.909090909 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234354156253 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969174241182 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309819884231 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144592036414 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274820265011 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...se, then it is triggered many people to becomes ill, so the massive influx patient in t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'consume'.
Suggestion: consume
...ing more simply, if many people tend to consumes healthy diets, then the issues could be...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93150684932 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5105893203 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544520547945 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1249075028 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.909090909 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234354156253 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969174241182 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309819884231 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144592036414 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274820265011 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.