In many countries, government spent a large amount of money on improving internet access. Why is it happening and do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?
In this day and age, more and more public attention has been placed on the huge amount of governmental funding into the development of internet access. There are several factors leading to the investments into this technology , and I agree that they are not the most wisely used budgets.
There are several reasons why governors spends a large amount of money on enhancing the quality of the internet. Firstly, the internet is a tool for people to study. In fact, both adults and youngsters can broaden their horizons through watching useful videos on the internet. Take myself as an example, two years ago, I often researched knowledge in ebooks through the internet before going to school; therefore, I was praised by my teachers for my academic improvement. Secondly, thanks to the wide availability of the internet, citizens can keep in touch with others by using social networking sites. Take my sister as an example, she has a best friend who lives far from home, but they have kept in touch for six years through social apps such as Zalo and Facebook.
I strongly believe that large financial spending on such a field could be inappropriate. Firstly, modern technology is now enough to meet human needs, so this requires no more investment. For instance, in Vietnam, it is rare to have to wait long to load a website because of the fast speed of the internet, so it is not necessary for local authorities to upgrade internet infrastructure. Secondly, money should be spent on building hospitals. Take my village as an example, many residents are suffering from Covid 19 without receiving timely treatment,so we need local authorities’ budgets to build quarantine areas and hospitals in order to fight this virus.
In conclusion, there are two main factors that foster the state to improve internet access, and I trust this is not the most optimal way for money to be used.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90595611285 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74985617522 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598746081505 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6251767076 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.785714286 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183645815417 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681584794563 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064698732783 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116367265707 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350168862796 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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