The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Who does not want taste of luxury? We all work hard so that we can afford luxury and get a taste of it. I strongly disagree with the above statement which translates to enjoying a luxury lifestyle will prevent a man to be a strong individual and in below paragraphs I'll be supporting my case.
Wanting and experiencing luxury lifestyle does not necessary means that it'll prevent us from developing into a strong individual. To afford a luxury lifestyle one should work hard at the first instance. A strong individual is not one who should not experience luxury lifestyle, rather the qualities he or she possess. Although living a luxurious life can make a man dull but that depends on how he enjoys his lifestyle. There are much chances where a person who has earned his money to enjoy sedentary lifestyle will be throwing his money and air or wasting his hard earned money as he/she knows how hard is to earn such kind of money to enjoy a lifestyle others dream of.
As it is rightly said that to glow in life one needs to burn first. In laymen terms, only those who are hard working can afford a luxury lifestyle. In some cases there are entities who can afford a wealthy lifestyle as they inherited large sum of money from their ancestors, but that money will be replenish soon enough if the person is not willing to work hard to multiply the money. Money and hard work goes hand in hand, i.e. one must work hard to earn money and enjoy perks of contemporary life. We've seen in movies like wall E, where the people living in the another planet got so dependent on technologies for their day to day chores that without them they are just like aged lion who can't go hunting, but there are other instances as well where people are enjoying the luxury and are strong individuals, just like Elon Musk who continuous to work hard everyday although he's the most richest person on planet.
In the end I would say that there is no harm in living a contemporary life but there should be a limit to it. Enjoying only the luxuries with money will make a man dull and he'll be dependent on others even for his basic tasks. So a person should enjoy his luxury lifestyle and should work on how to make him more independent strong.
- The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves 58
- The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves 58
- The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 50
- Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them 50
- Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...rong individual and in below paragraphs Ill be supporting my case. Wanting and e...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'possesses'.
Suggestion: possesses
...festyle, rather the qualities he or she possess. Although living a luxuroious life can ...
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Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... how he enjoys his lifestyle. There are much chances where a person who has earned h...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o enjoy a lifestyle others dream of. As it is rightly said that to glow in life...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: We've
...y and enjoy perks of contemporary life. Weve seen in movies like wall E, where the p...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: he's
...ntionous to work hard everyday although hes the most richest person on planet. I...
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Line 5, column 889, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'richest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: richest
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the richest'.
Suggestion: most the richest
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Message: Did you mean 'he'll'?
Suggestion: he'll
...ies with money will make a man dull and hell be dependent on others even for his bas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, kind of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49507389163 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41047449562 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477832512315 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.3023014001 60.3974514979 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0625 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196131147134 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778452981584 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647489065753 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131734815663 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235237739296 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.