The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

Essay topics:

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010.

The pie charts show how many people in towns A and B worked in three separate areas in 1960 and 2010.
Overall, the most people in town A worked in manufacturing, while a large percentage of people in town B worked in the sales force.
In 1960, the percentage of people working in the sales industry was the highest in both town A and town B, at 41% and 72% respectively. In second place, the proportion of people working in the service industry accounted for 30% and 20% respectively in towns A and B. The lowest percentage of people working in the service industry was 29% in town A and 8% in town B.
In 2010, the number of people working in the manufacturing industry grew and reached the highest rate with 64% in town A. While, the percentage of people working in the manufacturing industry in town B was the lowest with only 24%. In town B the percentage of people working in sales made up for the highest percentage with 54% when while the number of people working in the sales industry in town A only accounted for 20% and ranks 2nd. The percentage of people working in the service industry in town A was only 16% and was in the lowest position, and in town B, it accounted for about 22% and ranked 2nd.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in town B was the lowest with only 24%. In town B the percentage of people working...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36123348018 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58586180726 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.334801762115 0.547539520022 61% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3109888428 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 5.23603664747 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400900775322 0.215688989381 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.243173883379 0.103423049105 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722817930505 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318317983494 0.15604864568 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440781304956 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.2 8.06136585366 77% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 40.7170731707 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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