In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for the plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.
The Mayor of the city of Hillview believes that the unemployment issues will be mollified if the city council authorizes the large campaign to attract the automobile manufacturing company and offer tax incentives. The unemployment in the city increased because of the abandonment of Computech, a computer software programming company last year. He believes that the new establishment of the automobile company plant in their area will be helpful to the city’s residents. However, the Mayor’s argument is based on many assumptions which makes the argument unconvincing.
Firstly, the Mayor suggests that the building of automobile manufacturing plant will solve the unemployment issue. Further, the mayor suggests that the Hillview landfill which has been undeveloped for several years will be a perfect place for this plant. However, he/she has given no reasoning about the reliability of the plant on that landfill. It could be possible that the construction is not feasible there. If this is the case, it would be unlikely that Autotech company would not invest for the plant in Hillview city. This undermines the mayor’s argument.
Secondly, no views and interests of the automobile company is provided. If the company is not interested in expanding their business or does not have enough funding to start the manufacturing at new location, there is no point in discussion then.
Thirdly, the mayor has not provided the growth and future of the company. If the company would not be able to provide the minimum wages to the workers, the mayor should look for alternative solutions to this unemployment problem.
Further, the author states the reason for unemployment to be the abandonment of the computer software company. Even if the automobile company opens its plant in the city, it does not gaurantee that, it will hire employees from the Hillview city. Moreover, as most of the residents worked in software company, they may lack necessary skills which are required for automobile company. Therefore, this assumption of the mayor does not hold true.
Finally, the mayor asks city council to arrange a large campaign to attract the company. To make it more lureable, the major suggests council to offer tax incentives. However, despite the benefits, if the company, it is possibility that the company does not find it profitable to invest in new plant in Hillview as the company’s overall cost increases, for instance, if the hillview has more transportation costs their other plant or if the popluation purchasing the car are low in surroundings, the company might not invest.
In conclusion, the Mayor’s argument is not cogent. He/she needs to offer realiable statistics that the company is interested in manufacturing their plant and it is beneficial to both residents of Hillview and company. Also, the mayor needs to explore other options that would contribute in alleviating the unemployment issue.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ct place for this plant. However, he/she has given no reasoning about the reliabi...
^^
Line 12, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons that would contribute in alleviating the unemployment issue.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2470.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28907922912 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95420340302 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423982869379 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.6928506912 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.916666667 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231927032671 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673228040802 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706014222918 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117092849754 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709726140409 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ct place for this plant. However, he/she has given no reasoning about the reliabi...
^^
Line 12, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons that would contribute in alleviating the unemployment issue.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2470.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28907922912 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95420340302 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423982869379 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.6928506912 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.916666667 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231927032671 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673228040802 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706014222918 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117092849754 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709726140409 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.