You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
There have been growing concerns regarding the fact that the private information of many individuals is being stored by large technology corporations such as Facebook or Tiktok. Personally, although storing personal data can be beneficial to both the users and the company, this comes at the cost of internet privacy and security, and the disadvantages outweigh the advantages in the long run.
The acquisition of personal data by large companies enables them to understand their users better. With the help of machine learning, information can be analyzed to help a company provide better services and customize its products to meet different customers' needs. Facebook, for instance, is known for tracking user behavior to help advertisers reach their target audiences. This is particularly convenient to users as the products they wish to purchase appear right in front of their eyes.
Nevertheless, in most cases, private information is collected without the users’ consent which is near impossible for them to know what their data is being used for. First of all, because companies are capable of selling their users’ databases to advertising agencies who can bombard the user with several advertisements regardless of platforms, the users’ comfort is compromised. It was not long ago when Facebook (the most popular social media up-to-date) was sued for violating consumer privacy laws by sharing personal data of users with third parties. Another risk that individuals face when having their data stored is that hackers may use the data they steal to blackmail and scam money. In some cases, banking information can be used to withdraw money illegally from the owners’ accounts.
In conclusion, the marginal benefits of access to personal information by private
companies are undeniable. The advantages, however, are dwarfed by substantial disadvantages, including personal data security breaches and the annoyance from advertisements the user has to experience when they are online. It is therefore
important that governments regulate companies and individuals to attempt to take back a degree of control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, therefore, third, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in most cases, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53211009174 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97875967359 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574923547401 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6701515179 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.214285714 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11951028675 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484402170121 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401422243196 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739177509056 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442300658991 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.