In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while other consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The involvement of teenagers in some sort of paid job has been a highly debatable issue.
Some masses believe that this is absolutely incorrect whereas others opine that it provides
experience which is essential for learning and taking responsibilities.I personally accord
with the latter viewpoint and same shall be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence, there are few points that backs the former perspective. Firstly,there are
excessive chances of exploitation as they will concentrate less on studies and in some
cases they can abandon their school for work.As a result,it will affect their future life.
Secondly,they may also get bullied by their co-workers causing serious psychological issues
for them.Moreover,there wages will be low and they will have to work for longer hours.
On the contrary,youngsters learn to value money at a young age and a sense of responsibility
is acquired.It also opens a more opportunities in life for instance they donot have to work
as intern to obtain work experiences.In addition getting a partime job contributes to character
development as it teaches them the value of hardwork and exposes them to real world.
Thus,they will be more decorum in life which is good habit.
Apart from this,most of the adolescents work to support their family.Children
coming from poor backgrounds ,the paid employment is an opportunity for them.They
often work for an additional income ,no matter how small.They want to he independent.
To conclude,I affirm that a little work experience at a young age can build a character despite
it will neglect their studies.They should work on weekdays only and the job should not come before
studies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, apart from, for instance, in addition, sort of, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44943820225 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32817426793 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625468164794 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.5288497995 49.4020404114 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.666666667 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.6666666667 7.06120827912 250% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.38176352705 434% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 32.0 5.01903807615 638% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15008981413 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631651380821 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415522210414 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0481228726706 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406759542633 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.22 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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