ielts writing task 1 26/02/2022
The given chart compares the proportions of players of violin, guitar, piano and drum among students over a period of ten years, starting from 2005.
It is evident that guitar and piano had the highest figures for players and also experienced significant growth over the period with the guitar remaining the favourite musical instrument for school children. However, drum and violin shared an unremarkable growing pattern when there were no noticeable changes in their percentages.
In 2005, the figures for both guitar and piano stood at around 10%. Surprisingly, the statistic of guitar rose drastically to reach its peak at about 27% in 2015, which also helped it preserve its position as the most-played instrument among students. Moreover, a similar growing feature was seen in the proportion of school children choosing piano as their entertainment source with its figure standing at 25% in 2015, 2.5 times higher than that in 2005.
On the other hand, standing at around 6% and 8% in 2005 in players for drum and violin respectively, those figures remain almost unchanged in the next five years. At the end of the period, the percentage of students deciding to play the drums was only about 8%, while that of the violin was around 7%.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'preserves'?
Suggestion: preserves
...about 27% in 2015, which also helped it preserve its position as the most-played instrum...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1046.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05314009662 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64022810621 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594202898551 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2100610391 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.75 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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