Many people use social media to get in touch with other people and know about news events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that in recent years, more and more people communicate with the others and keep themselves updated by utilizing the internet. While using the social media might put people in risks of security breaches, I believe that the benefits of this tendency are more significant.
Users’ data could be compromised by using the social media. Hackers could steal their personal information, and sell their credit card numbers or online bank account passwords to third parties, for example. The consequences of this would be a lose in money, which could be the saving for important purposes of users.
On the other hand, the internet provides conveniency and offers people a wide range of information. In terms of the convenience it brings to users, communication between people and people has become easier than ever owing to the development of technology. Communicating apps such as Zalo or Facebook, for instance, provide platforms where citizens from different nations could talk or message each other at any time and in any location. Additionally, corporations utilize those apps to hold meetings and make important decisions without wasting time to travel to a specific location. For the information sources, instead of buying newspapers and wait for the next morning to update news, people can now keep themselves updated by clicking on the latest news on their mobile devices. The social media helps people update their lives with their family and friends and vice versa. Especially youngsters who have huge admiration for idols or actors, they could see pictures and videos of their idols’ daily lives, for instance.
In conclusion, although using social media brings about positive effect, I argue that the convenience and the amount of information that it provides to users are more significant.
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| 2023-07-21 | Vivi_peach | 89 | view |
| 2023-07-21 | Zeroplague0407 | 78 | view |
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...mple. The consequences of this would be a lose in money, which could be the saving for...
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Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'help'.
Suggestion: help
... their mobile devices. The social media helps people update their lives with their fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, third, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25517241379 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75116233138 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606896551724 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0019989865 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.230769231 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201546942545 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792186162255 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620877218662 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124992073565 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525662231491 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...mple. The consequences of this would be a lose in money, which could be the saving for...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'help'.
Suggestion: help
... their mobile devices. The social media helps people update their lives with their fa...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, third, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25517241379 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75116233138 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606896551724 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0019989865 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.230769231 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201546942545 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792186162255 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620877218662 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124992073565 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525662231491 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.