Although families have powerful influence on children, the influence that comes from outside the family plays a bigger part in children's development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has raised a public concern over the past decades that not only parents but also outside factors play an indispensable role in their children’s development. I completely agree with two assertions that children’s improvement, nowadays, have been impacted by their parents and outside factors and in this essay, I will support my viewpoint with examples.
For a variety of reasons, it would be true that family members, especially parents, play an integral part in every child’s schooling development. Most parents understand that education is a life-transforming opportunity for all their children, especially when the job market is increasingly competitive. In some Asian countries, an ever-increasing number of parents lay a solid influence on their children to exert more pressure on them day by day to be successful in the future. It can be said that education, to many families, is the only method to ease the financial burden in the future for their children.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that it is true when impact coming from outside the family, such as friends, have a bigger impact on the development of children in attitude. The vast majority of students easily develop a habit based on the environment in which they are interacting every day. For example, in Vietnam, if children get close to some people who have negative attitudes, they will easily form such numerous attitudes. The children gradually mislead and develop in a worse way if no one detects and intervenes in time.
I would fully support that both family members, especially parents and the outside factors have a great influence on their kids’ development. Therefore, it is necessary to reinforce the bond with the children so that parents and people outside can easily interfere on the spot in any urgent cases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for example, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16216216216 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98537798922 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560810810811 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0154868406 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 127.333333333 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268952555439 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939564753914 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471974546163 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156181209236 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229708564 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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