Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
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Educating school students on the consequences of carrying out a crime has long been a contentious issue. There is a common belief that it is the best way to have ex-prisoners who will share their real experiences to pupils. While I agree that asking those who have directly in the situation will be a great educational method, I am also convinced that there will be another alternative ways to help school student understand well about crime, which I will discuss further below.
On the first hand, It is not wrong to mention that students will be aware truly of the consequences of committing crime through reformed criminals. These used-to-be wrongdoers are real illustrations that people must pay for their unlawful activities. Their stories might be vivid and persuasive enough to attract students easily. As student are in the age of being curious about the actual life outside the schools, where they can gather knowledge about situations that is on the point of occurrence. Take career choice workshop as an example. One of the most inspirational factors attracting students is that it has real speakers in such industries to talk about lessons in ordinary life. Hence, these speeches help students to gain subjective views about life in general and crime in particular.
However, I completely belive that a combinations of different education methods would also help pupils to aware of the dangers of crime for the victims. Firstly, it is about how parents teach their childrens at home. Before going to school, students have several time to stay with their parents and be educated what is right or wrong. It is said that home environment contains profound effects which can affect student significantly. Parents must be pioneers to educate children at an early age about negative activities and how to avoid them. In addition, school also plays a crucial role in training pupils to be a good citizens and have knowledge on lawless actions. Criminology should be an compulsory subject at school with the aim of providing useful lectures. Only that, students are going to be taught all the necessary understanding, including crime prevention.
In conclusion, personaly, it is not the best to ask ex-criminals sharing their experiences to students. It may be a beneficial way to help students learn vividly about what happen in real situation. However, there will be numerous effective methods to train pupils about unlawful activities and criminal, such as adding criminology as a important topic at school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14492753623 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84498409736 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548309178744 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0045612726 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212263829006 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618613164858 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375888052466 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130819480818 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421880108354 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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