In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Different cultures have various methods to bring up children. In many countries, educational systems encourage children to try hard because they think it is just way to achieve children to their goals. In my opinion, this can lead to great achievements, but for the majority engenders feelings of inadequacy.
On the one side, it is very good that by this issue children have to try hard. They understand they without attempt no one cannot reach to his/her aim. They believe every thing can possible just should have enough try. In addition, this issue can play a critical role in future’s children and make them stand on own feet. Not only can they solve their problems independently but also it can shape a strong person of them.
On the other side, educational systems and parents should notice to negative effects that can appear in long-term. Jealously is one of the minuses affects that are very harmful for a child in his/her earlier years. It can create a sense of hate inside every child toward other who are in competition with the child. Whereas, in most cases lead to depression when they could not reach their aims.
Finally, these negative effects can eliminate by a good education structure which parents and schools must follow it. hence, I think in some cultures that this subject is important their people are very successful than other countries like Japan.
In conclusion, delivering this message to children has many positive aspects in their life that can appear in their adult.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... who are in competition with the child. Whereas, in most cases lead to depression when ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, so, whereas, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94094488189 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50710751089 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586614173228 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6523484188 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325454764946 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103766668531 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701326578472 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173974616665 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100414217012 0.056905535591 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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