WHAT WOULD YOU CHANGE ONE IMPORTANT THING ABOUT YOUR HOMETOWN
My hometown, Banjarmasin get an epithet city with one thousand rivers, I spend my time in this city but now many change in my city especilly about environment. Now pollution increases in Banjarmasin primery problem about rubbish and industry waste. The problem is very apprehensive and the government must supertend it.Because if the problem is not finished, it will give effects not only for environment but also for human surround too. So one important thing about my hometown that I would change is enviromental cleaness.
Firstly that the government must give attention to decrease environmental quality in the city because in every cornerand rivers in city we find the rubbish and it makes side of city dirty-looking and nobody wants to see it. Therefore if this condition is not immediatly solved how the goverment can increase their tourism sectorin my province.
The last is about pollutant of industry because now the rivers in my hometown get rubbish contamination from pollutan of household and industrial.It not only comes from big industrial but also from small-scaled industrialthat have defiled rivers in my city. Rivers are very important because many people epecially live in the edge of rivers depend on rivers to fulfill daily necessary. They utilize it for cooking, drink, bath and many moore and when the rubbish and pollutan defile the rivers it is dangerous for people around it. The government must reduce it soon, they must demand to society and entrepreneur not to throw their pollutan in the rivers.
Finally theenvironment-decrease quality is avery apprehensivecondition must be reduced because it has impact especially for environment and people life.
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Banjarmasin get an epithet city
Banjarmasin gets to be an epithet city
Now pollution increases in Banjarmasin primery problem about rubbish and industry waste.
Now pollution increases in Banjarmasin, and the primary problem is about rubbish and industry waste.
from small-scaled industrialthat have
from small-scaled industries that have
They utilize it for cooking, drink, bath and many moore and when the rubbish and pollutan defile the rivers it is dangerous for people around it.
Description: 'it' refers to what?
is avery apprehensivecondition must be reduced
is a very apprehensive condition which must be reduced
Sentence: Now pollution increases in Banjarmasin primery problem about rubbish and industry waste.
Description: The fragment Now pollution is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace Now with adjective
Description: A noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to Banjarmasin and primery
Sentence: Finally theenvironment-decrease quality is avery apprehensivecondition must be reduced because it has impact especially for environment and people life.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to people and life
Sentence: My hometown, Banjarmasin get an epithet city with one thousand rivers, I spend my time in this city but now many change in my city especilly about environment.
Error: especilly Suggestion: especially
Sentence: Now pollution increases in Banjarmasin primery problem about rubbish and industry waste.
Error: primery Suggestion: primary
Sentence: The problem is very apprehensive and the government must supertend it.Because if the problem is not finished, it will give effects not only for environment but also for human surround too.
Error: supertend Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: So one important thing about my hometown that I would change is enviromental cleaness.
Error: cleaness Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: enviromental Suggestion: environmental
Sentence: Firstly that the government must give attention to decrease environmental quality in the city because in every cornerand rivers in city we find the rubbish and it makes side of city dirty-looking and nobody wants to see it.
Error: cornerand Suggestion: cornered
Sentence: Therefore if this condition is not immediatly solved how the goverment can increase their tourism sectorin my province.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Error: immediatly Suggestion: immediately
Error: sectorin Suggestion: sector
Sentence: The last is about pollutant of industry because now the rivers in my hometown get rubbish contamination from pollutan of household and industrial.It not only comes from big industrial but also from small-scaled industrialthat have defiled rivers in my city.
Error: pollutan Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: industrialthat Suggestion: industrial that
Sentence: Rivers are very important because many people epecially live in the edge of rivers depend on rivers to fulfill daily necessary.
Error: epecially Suggestion: specially
Sentence: They utilize it for cooking, drink, bath and many moore and when the rubbish and pollutan defile the rivers it is dangerous for people around it.
Error: pollutan Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: moore Suggestion: more
Sentence: The government must reduce it soon, they must demand to society and entrepreneur not to throw their pollutan in the rivers.
Error: pollutan Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally theenvironment-decrease quality is avery apprehensivecondition must be reduced because it has impact especially for environment and people life.
Error: apprehensivecondition Suggestion: apprehensive condition
Error: theenvironment-decrease Suggestion: environment decrease
Error: avery Suggestion: No alternate word
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