It is commonly said that today’s children are pressurized as were yesterday’s adults. That’s true in the sense that children are facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening simply because of the ever increasing demands of life, from the same perspectives, on humans in general. While it is important that children excel in their age to become successful as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a balance between material and psychological growth.
As the global village becomes more and more competitive everyday, it becomes important for us to prepare for the fight, so to speak, earlier and earlier. This is realized by all, which triggers societies to push their juveniles during their learning stage.
The other thing that is contributing to this ever rising pressure on children is the lack institutional opportunities, especially in developing countries. Now, more than ever, children are having to race each other for reaching the privilege of higher education.
While healthy competition is helpful for the psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race becomes more prominent than the objective. Of course the objective of children competing against each other ideally is brining the best out of themselves. But, very frequently, a child is compelled to compete for becoming better than the other. In other words, the competition becomes a brawl rather than being a sprint.
To stop such spiteful struggle among our young, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental institutions, such as schools and colleges. Students must contest for academic betterment, not social supremacy. Also, parents should get proactively involved in promoting sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their own vengefulness in the lives of their children. To sustain such social reformation the government must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success.
The conclusion here is simple. The children today are being put into a ‘survival-of-the fittest’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do their best. Such untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, in general, of course, such as, in other words, so to speak
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.5418719212 218% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 31.9359605911 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.75862068966 208% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1207.87684729 172% => OK
No of words: 376.0 242.827586207 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52925531915 5.00649968141 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 3.92707691288 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19398727601 2.71678728327 118% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 139.433497537 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577127659574 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 379.143842365 168% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 12.6551724138 166% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8060490623 50.4703680194 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.9669160288 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 7.25397266985 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.12807881773 145% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.33497536946 150% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 6.9802955665 186% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172817686335 0.242375264174 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475415736978 0.0925447433944 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428531546906 0.071462118173 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871847176111 0.151781067708 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660972882262 0.0609392437508 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 12.6369458128 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.1260098522 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.32886699507 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 55.0591133005 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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