The claim that animals have 'rights' has been the subject of much debate since the 1970s. Are zoos helping or hurting our animals? Should zoos be banned? Do you agree or disagree?

The extreme sports such as parachuting, bungee-jumping and scuba-diving became famous in nowadays young generation. Some people think that these sports will enhance the personal confidence, increases the strength, courage and reduces the fear, while others argue that these are very dangerous sports and prone to injuries and even the death. I am inclined to believe that these sports are dangerous and they should not be promoted. The following paragraphs will analyze their consequences.
Firstly of all, extreme sports are dangerous and risky. These forms of activities should not be promoted and should be prohibited. For instance, during bungee-jumping if the rope tears down leads to injuries or even death. Hence these sports should not encouraged.
Second of all, extreme sports played by people experiences inner strength, confident, and gets positive motivation to take a risk. This leads to increase positive attitude for the young people. Let us consider an example of parachuting game, where the participant will come out of fear and participates in this game, which increase his courage to take risk in real life.
From above discussion, in my view the extreme sports should be not promoted, instead other games to be promoted to get the people motivated and keep them physical fit and challenged.
To recapitulate, the extreme sports needs to be monitored and controlled by government and encourage the other sports to keep the people physical fit and motivated.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
PTE_Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...-jumping and scuba-diving became famous in nowadays young generation. Some people think tha...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...s down leads to injuries or even death. Hence these sports should not encouraged. Se...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'encourage'
Suggestion: encourage
...en death. Hence these sports should not encouraged. Second of all, extreme sports played ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, second, so, while, for instance, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 1207.87684729 103% => OK
No of words: 234.0 242.827586207 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34188034188 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84579448977 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 139.433497537 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 379.143842365 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1790249135 50.4703680194 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1538461538 104.977214359 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.9669160288 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.25397266985 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0500859288321 0.242375264174 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0236861318094 0.0925447433944 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365310047629 0.071462118173 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0354035436359 0.151781067708 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274213157349 0.0609392437508 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 12.6369458128 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32886699507 97% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 55.0591133005 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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