Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Write between 200 and 300 words.
Not only junk food causes obesity but also excessive sugar is equally responsible for it. Some people believes that sugary drink should be taxed to prevent people from drinking them while others argue that a tax in unnecessary and public education and awareness are the best way to decrease sugar consumption. I am inclined to believe that education towards sugar consumption is important rather than imposing tax. This essay will discuss how education and awareness can be helpful to convince people to avoid excessive sugar consumption.
Firstly, Advantages and disadvantages of sugar consumption in any form should be included in children's curriculum and to educate them that sugary drinks and juices contain high amount of sugar and it can be harmful for physical and mantel well-being specially contributes in obesity. Government should mandate one period to educate children on what should eat and what shouldn't and reward them at timely manner to follow health habits to encourage them. For instance: In my childhood, we are not allowed to have sugary drinks even those were prohibited in school premises as well.
Secondly, Children should be encouraging from tender age towards exercising and physical work out as it will help them to burn out the excessive sugary drink's calories and keep themselves physically fit. Physically fit children also have good and active mantel health. School should have one period to dedicated to games and outdoor activity. For instance: Children should have fresh juice after physical work out instead of canned juice which contributes in obesity.
In conclusion, the forgoing discussion propounds the view that people should be more aware and educated about causes of obesity and how sugar drink can be as harmful as junk food and increase their intake of fresh fruit juice or fruits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...te children on what should eat and what shouldnt and reward them at timely manner to fol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 6.10837438424 213% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 8.36945812808 227% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1207.87684729 128% => OK
No of words: 294.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25510204082 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61883778645 2.71678728327 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 139.433497537 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557823129252 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 379.143842365 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1719911041 50.4703680194 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 104.977214359 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.9669160288 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.25397266985 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450512809933 0.242375264174 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16517018741 0.0925447433944 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.194440598006 0.071462118173 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281321694482 0.151781067708 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.205727673039 0.0609392437508 338% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 12.6369458128 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.1260098522 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.5310837438 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 55.0591133005 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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