In the last years, obesity has significantly increased due to enormous amounts of sugar consumption. Some people are convinced that, in order to avoid this situation, sugary drink prices should rise, while others maintain that the real issue is public education. This essay will discuss the reasons why public education should be the main concern in order to fight obesity.
To begin with, sugary drinks have become more popular for families with young children and also for adolescents. These drinks were made part of the common diet, which turned into a consumption habit. Therefore, the only way to change a bad habit, is through education. Governments should incorporate health habits teaching at school, as well as, in local communities. As a result, people would develop the ability to recognize the consequences of their alimentation choices.
On the other hand, some people believe that adding a tax to drinks with sugar will discourage customers to buy them due to the high price. This solution has been tried before in Australia, for example. In Australia, taxes have been added to alcohol in order to decrease its consumption, but it didn't work. It is evident, that people don't react to the price, when buying something they really want. Sugary drinks and alcohol have in common, that both are addictive, so, the price would not stop people from acquiring them.
To sum up, the inclusion of sugary drinks in our daily diet has become more popular and it has been also linked with an increase in cases of obesity. Although some people believe that the solution is to rise prices, others think that education plays a key role. In my opinion, education is the most important factor to determine whether someone would choose to buy a sugary drink, while being aware of its consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, for example, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.75862068966 208% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1207.87684729 125% => OK
No of words: 300.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01666666667 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54606231922 2.71678728327 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 139.433497537 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606666666667 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 379.143842365 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.71428571429 350% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.65517241379 219% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6551724138 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0501086228 50.4703680194 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.0625 104.977214359 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.9669160288 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.25397266985 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 6.9802955665 172% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41669894191 0.242375264174 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111218109006 0.0925447433944 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779292786426 0.071462118173 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229134227792 0.151781067708 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785322125343 0.0609392437508 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 12.6369458128 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.5310837438 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32886699507 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 55.0591133005 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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