In the recent decade, the proportion of gaining weight keeps growing significantly. While some people believe that authorities are mostly involved, others argue that parents are responsible for this issue. In my point of view, a kid’s weight is controlled explicitly by parents and relatives.
To begin with, children obesity is undeniable a problem causes by the government in some aspects. First of all, the government controls the amount of food being used in their nation. Authorities check on ingredients for which they are healthy or not. For instance, they have to ban or limit the amount of exotic food like the one which was poisoned or contains invalid chemicals. Secondly, if the government does not give solutions in time, the percentage of overweight children will increase more faster. Opening compulsory courses which reduce harmful fat and other factors which cause obesity is a good way to be considered. For example, children can be sent to a class that has salad and healthy food for meals or get exercise at particular times.
Nevertheless, I would argue that parent’s responsibility is more indispensable rather than the government’s. As can be clearly seen, parents are the ones who care for children’s meals and what kind of food they are allowed to eat in order to grow healthy. A mother or father who always spends time cooking meals for their kid will never use unhealthy ones, for example. Another scientific reason is that a parent who has an overweight gene will hereditarily pass it to their children, whether they are eating healthy or not. Moreover, adult diets also play an important role in child food. If a parent prefers eating junk food rather than salad, their kid will reflect that obviously, for instance.
In conclusion, although the government’s role in control the weight of children is undeniable, parents will always be the most significant factor which decides the child weight and avoid obesity from the young generation.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d explicitly by parents and relatives. To begin with, children obesity is unden...
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Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...ge of overweight children will increase more faster. Opening compulsory courses which reduc...
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Suggestion:
...s or get exercise at particular times. Nevertheless, I would argue that parent’...
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Suggestion:
... reflect that obviously, for instance. In conclusion, although the government’s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 31.9359605911 97% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1207.87684729 137% => OK
No of words: 324.0 242.827586207 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11728395062 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.92707691288 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83106636225 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 139.433497537 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586419753086 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 379.143842365 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5280382426 50.4703680194 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5294117647 104.977214359 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0588235294 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.25397266985 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269189020779 0.242375264174 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885076069659 0.0925447433944 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078946563779 0.071462118173 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165140911777 0.151781067708 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050975367949 0.0609392437508 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 12.6369458128 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.1260098522 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.9458128079 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.5310837438 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32886699507 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d explicitly by parents and relatives. To begin with, children obesity is unden...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...ge of overweight children will increase more faster. Opening compulsory courses which reduc...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s or get exercise at particular times. Nevertheless, I would argue that parent’...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... reflect that obviously, for instance. In conclusion, although the government’s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 31.9359605911 97% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1207.87684729 137% => OK
No of words: 324.0 242.827586207 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11728395062 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.92707691288 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83106636225 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 139.433497537 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586419753086 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 379.143842365 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5280382426 50.4703680194 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5294117647 104.977214359 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0588235294 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.25397266985 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269189020779 0.242375264174 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885076069659 0.0925447433944 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078946563779 0.071462118173 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165140911777 0.151781067708 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050975367949 0.0609392437508 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 12.6369458128 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.1260098522 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.9458128079 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.5310837438 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32886699507 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.