TPO 35
Most of us owe our enjoyable and cheerful time to those people who brings us a distinctive environment and excitement. We may make our decision changing as we have been affected by an athletes or actor/ actress's action, life or manner. I believe that our life is under impact of those people incessantly, and they needs more privacy than they have in recent days. In opinion, not only do they have a great numbers of fans, but also their life is threatened by some opponent, which in both status their life involve a great deals of troubles. I encroaches my idea more in the following paragraphs.
From a personal point of view, all these celebrities, from athletes to entertainers, are normal individuals same as we are while according to the type of their job, they are under inspection more which is too frustrating. Indeed, they have no sense of comfort as they appear in the public due to the aggregation of photographs, fans, and particularly paparazzi which are following them in every condition and place. They are actually entitled to have a private life like the other people. To illustrate it, as an actress enters a department store to go for a shopping, all people gather her and do not allow her to do nothing, only taking photo and responding to some ridiculous or rude questions about her private life. Generally speaking, people must perceive that they should not cross over these people's privacy and respect them to have their own casual lifestyle.
From a privacy matter angle, their personal life's matter is always fluctuating by some unexpected rumors or fake news about their life. There are some time to be confronted a fraud in the title of an athlete and some degradations are committed only for taking the advantage of their reputation and attribute. For instance, one of the athlete's pages on Instagram was hacked to make money as an earthquake was occurred. The hacker informed people to pay money him to help injured people while the real athlete was not aware of this fraud. As soon as he figured out what was happening, police security followed the fake one and arrested him. In this way, people lost their trust to any online celebrities' page. Therefore, they needs more privacy with vigorous security to prevent such a destructive disturbance.
In conclusion, following the esteem of this group of people, they should be provided more privacy to keep their life more safe and comfortable. In other words, it is needed to halt looking through their private life and let them be relaxed as they appear in the public. Furthermore, online pages of these people should be sustained in a safer status to constrain fraud and any abusive usage.
- Do you agree or disagree? People meet any problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary. 76
- Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to succeed at college or university?Tutors in university.The encouragement from family and friends.High-quality education from high school. 73
- TPO 35 3
- TPO 35 3
- T P O 53 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an athlete' or simply 'athletes'?
Suggestion: an athlete; athletes
...on changing as we have been affected by an athletes or actor/ actresss action, life or mann...
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Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...t of those people incessantly, and they needs more privacy than they have in recent d...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 545, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'encroach'
Suggestion: encroach
...fe involve a great deals of troubles. I encroaches my idea more in the following paragraph...
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Line 3, column 801, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...e that they should not cross over these peoples privacy and respect them to have their ...
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Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...nline celebrities page. Therefore, they needs more privacy with vigorous security to ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85371179039 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66903424976 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517467248908 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1543876571 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.15 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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