IELTS writing task 1The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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IELTS writing task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

This line graph gives the amount of fish, meat, lamb and beef that the people of a European country consumed from 1979 to 2004.

Overall, the fish and meat consumption varied continually between 1979 and 2004. The fish consumption always was the lowest while the rest of the catalogues one was very complicated.

The lamb consumption didn't vary like the amount of beef was eaten. The beef consumption always was higher than that of lamb. In 1979, the lamb started around 150 and decreased gradually to 50 grams in 2004. In terms of the beef consumption, there was a dip in 1982 from above 200 to below 200 grams, although after that having a slight growth, the decline still took place continually and the number in 2004 was approximately 150 grams per person per week.

The consumption of chicken trended upwards, with some minor fluctuations. Although it started at a lower level than a lamb, it reached the highest was 250 grams. By contrast, the fish one always stayed at the lowest at around 50 grams, The good side of fish consumption had that was very consistent, there wasn't any variation in the whole time referred.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of a European country consumed from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the fish and meat c...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...een 1979 and 2004. The fish consumption always was the lowest while the rest of the catalo...
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Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ry complicated. The lamb consumption didnt vary like the amount of beef was eaten....
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Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...vary like the amount of beef was eaten. The beef consumption always was higher than...
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Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...of beef was eaten. The beef consumption always was higher than that of lamb. In 1979, the ...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...ion had that was very consistent, there wasnt any variation in the whole time referre...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 940.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79591836735 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55263214391 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545918367347 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.8677330972 43.030603864 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6 5.23603664747 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214138247114 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102442023773 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980481638579 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163646104289 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822274231165 0.0819641961636 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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