Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement?

It is argued that in modern society, we are surrounded by excessive choices. That is we have to choose one among many options we have. I totally agree with this statement since in my opinion, unnecessarily various choices are caused by industrialization and globalization.

In 21st century, because of industrialization, there are too much segmented options when we purchase goods, which makes it hard to select only one among them. For example, when we visit supermarkets for buying a laundry detergent, we may find tens of laundry detergents all from different brands. As each product advertises itself with different features and prices, comparing products respectively to find out the best product provokes consumers' fatigue. Therefore from the example of the supermarket, it can be seen that we have considerably many choices.

Furthermore globalization has had the significant role to increase the number of choices. As more and more countries trade their countries' products to foreign countries, the range of choices have kept being wider. Not only consumers but also students are affected by globalization since they can apply to foreign schools more easily than the past. Without foreign universities as options, the process of decision would be simpler and faster. From these cases, students have difficulty determining which university to enter.

To sum up, it is evident that we are suffering from excessively many choices in modern society because of industrialization and globalization.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[10]
Message: The pronoun is must be used with 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...e surrounded by excessive choices. That is we have to choose one among many option...
^^
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...est product provokes consumers fatigue. Therefore from the example of the supermarket, it...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...t we have considerably many choices. Furthermore globalization has had the significant r...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 233.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48068669528 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21415962295 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613733905579 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8316577933 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2307692308 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178693199418 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664343312295 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061503827969 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115543992817 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789075517326 0.056905535591 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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