The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The Charts illustrate the online shopping sales in different four sectors such as travel, film/ music in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013.The data calibrated in percentage.
Have a look on the first pie chart,there was a 36% travellers did travel for the shopping however, the sale of film and music less than a fifth with the comparison of former in 2003.Moreover, difference of 5% could be noticed in between the books and clothes about 14%, 24% respectively in the same time period.
By having a glance on the second chart, with in the time period of next 10 years. Traveld by the people for the shopping, it kept on near around less than a third percent whereas, other things such as, books and clothes which were lie between 22% and 16% in last year.
Overall, least popular was clothes on the other hand, mostly shopping done through the travel over the time period.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, third, whereas, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 719.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66883116883 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45465711283 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655844155844 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 203.4 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.8101516304 43.030603864 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.8 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.0 5.23603664747 344% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242179689634 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123717538333 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127044257306 0.0843802449381 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14851747713 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130873658352 0.0819641961636 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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