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Topic-It is often necessary even desirable for the political leaders to withhold some information from the public.
Many a times, it not only becomes crucial but also indispensable for the ruling government to refrain themselves from revealing certain piece of data to the citizens of the country keeping in mind the sensitivity of the issue as well as consequences of sharing it. On the other hand, government officials should not conceal another category of data from the denizens which is beneficial for them. I agree with the speaker’s viewpoint to a great extent and my reasons for the same are discussed further in the ensuing paragraphs.
The primary reason why I agree with the speaker’s opinion is the confidentiality of certain piece of data. For instance, Defence is the most important sector for any nation as it deals with the security of the people of the country. If any of the strategies made by the defence department are disclosed in open, then it can lead to misuse of such information in case it falls in wrong hands. Another example is that of Income Tax Raids. If such raids are declared in advance, then the suspected tax avoiders may escape the punishment which will be unfair for the people who sincerely pay their taxes.
My secondary reason to support the speaker in his stand is taking into account the consequences of sharing a specific group of data. The best example which I can think of is the cross-border tensions such as fake terrorist threat calls or enmity among the neighbouring nations. If such kind of data is shared with the civilians than it can lead to fear as well as chaos all over the country. The second case is that of topics which are related to various caste and religion. This class of data should be dealt with utmost care so that it may not hurt anyone’s sentiments and also prevent communal riots across the nation. The triple talaq bill/Ayodhya Ram Mandir case is an apt example of how the Indian government deals with such topics.
On the contrary, it is also essential to share certain information with the public which could be advantageous for them. One such example is of the government schemes and subsidies which must be announced publicly so that the civilians can take the maximum benefit from them. Such policies comprise of Pradhan Mantri Jan Dhan Yojna (PMJDY), Pradhan Mantri Rojgar Yojna (PMRY), LPG subsidies, Pradhan Mantri Krushi Vikas Yojna (PMKVY) to name a few. Another vital piece of data which must be shared with the people is about the law and order. In order to follow the rules and regulations strictly, it is required that the citizens have complete knowledge about the same.
Thus, to conclude the discussion I would like to say that it is necessary to take extreme care about sensitivity of the data and related consequences of sharing that information with the people. Also, a careful thought must be taken into consideration about the benefits and drawbacks of any data before it is announced in front of general public.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...fit from them. Such policies comprise of Pradhan Mantri Jan Dhan Yojna PMJDY, Pra...
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...ave complete knowledge about the same. Thus, to conclude the discuss...
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...data before it is announced in front of general public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, kind of, such as, as well as, on the contrary, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85771543086 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6810227115 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49498997996 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6173184007 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7619047619 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0904852353723 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292288072614 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362026257092 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0586848381031 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310012490516 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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