We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection, and even to fly planes.
What things will computers be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
The invention of computers are claimed to be one of the paramount innovation among the various breakthroughs in technology. Admittedly, computers have become a beneficial electronic device that people are making a good use of, in countless ways, may be in the field of industry, health and wellness, peace and order, and even in making it easier for an individual to accomplish daily tasks. Computers being a valuable device, have gone through an enormous number of transformations in line with the increasing demands of the human race, and innovations would further continue to address the more complicated needs in the future.
In this modern world where life-threatening illnesses are rampant and are increasingly taking away people’s lives, some claimed that, in the future, computer innovations would exponentially focus on the field of health and wellness. For example, a proposal about the creation of a computer-generated pill, which could be swallowed by an individual to assess the person’s overall health status and to determine the type of health problems a person is experiencing, is being continually studied these days. Henceforth, the prevention of getting a disease, or considerations of various treatment options before the prognosis worsens could be taken in action with the help of this pill. Moreover, recent inventions are believed to make the human race’s task accomplishment uncomplicated and trouble-free, thereby, the creation of computer-generated robots are being valuably studied and researched. In the future, the majority of the household chores are expected to be accomplished by these computer-generated robots, thus making the lives of employed people, more convenient, as tasks are being performed by robots at home while the employees are doing the job responsibilities at work.
Having mentioned some of the computer metamorphosis in the future, it is by no means certain that these changes could lengthen an individual’s lifespan and make a person’s task accomplishment, effortless. However, while these changes may be advantageous, it is highly important to utilize these breakthroughs responsibly as total dependence is crucially deleterious. To elaborate, a person has the capability to maintain and improve health through eating healthy, physical exercise and lifestyle modification practices, thus preventing illness even without the aid of computer-generated pills. In addition, the personal care a health care provider renders could not be exceeded nor equally offered by computer-generated assessors. Moreover, dependence on robots could undesirably make the people lazy, risking a person to live sedentarily, thereby, obesity and lifestyle-related diseases follow. Furthermore, letting the robots perform every task on a daily basis steals the people the ability to be skillful in doing household responsibilities.
Having all that in mind, personal efforts in responsible patronization of computer breakthroughs such as personal judgment and move to prevent diseases, initiation to personally accomplish household tasks and moderately utilizing computer-generated aid to avoid laziness and being not skilled should be taken exponential considerations. These ways, detrimental effects could be prevented or at least minimized. To conclude, breakthroughs in technology are rewarding only when used responsibly and not dependently, humans, still, are the wisest among all creations, and there is no creation of a human mind should people totally depend their lives.
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Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as to, at least, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3032.0 1615.20841683 188% => OK
No of words: 521.0 315.596192385 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81957773512 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.58367370193 2.80592935109 128% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 176.041082164 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529750479846 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 947.7 506.74238477 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5653085754 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.352941176 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6470588235 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216830479909 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076538184988 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313180593536 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151174531688 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303113008644 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.11 50.2224549098 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.3001002004 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.07 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 78.4519038076 215% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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