An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author concludes that if government in Tagus promotes the new type of millet it would lead to curb the Vitamin A deficiency in the nation. It has been cited by the author that the new variety of millet engineered by the international development organization would be given to the farmers at subsidized rate and since millet is a staple food of Tagus people would readily adopt to the the new variety of millet. I find lack of solid evidences in the author's argument which weakens the author's point and it lacks in convincing me. The assumptions made by the author are new variety of millet would adapt to the soil and environmental condition of Tagus and would fruit profitable amount of millet. The impoverished has people who are well enough capable of buying the new millet . Governments's promotion would ensure that people are buying millet only to curb the deficiency of the Vitamin A.
Firstly, it has been nowhere mentioned that new variety of millet would adjust to the soil and environmental condition of Tagus. It might be the situation where new variety is not so robust as it can stand the condition of minerals and water condition in Tagus land. Since the farmers are poor it hardly justifies that they would have enough resources to put fertilizers and provide regular water to the crops. Just getting the seeds at subsidized cost does not ensure that final yield would be considerable and profitable.
Secondly, it has been cited by the author that Tagus is an impoverished nation and it indicates that people on an average might be lacking the purchasing power, so how does it supports the point that new millet would be available to every resident of the nation. Whether the seed has been subsidized or not it puts no difference into the buyers purchasing capacity. Consequently, if the new millet is not reachable to everyone how does it help in curbing the Vitamin A deficiency.
Finally, government's promotion would definitely persuade the denizens to buy the new millet has no strong citation or backup in the argument. Whether they buy new millet or other sources for curbing the Vitamin A deficiency it is solely their choice. It has no evidence that people would not buy anything else to curb the deficiency apart from millet since it is their staple food.
In totality, I would disagree with author's assumptions as they lack proper evidence and are void of strong backup. So it can not be concluded that government's efforts in promoting the new millet would definitely curb the Vitamin A deficiency from Tagus.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 435 350
No. of Characters: 2084 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.567 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.791 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.682 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.94 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...aple food of Tagus people would readily adopt to the the new variety of millet. I find l...
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Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... of Tagus people would readily adopt to the the new variety of millet. I find lack of s...
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Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... of Tagus people would readily adopt to the the new variety of millet. I find lack of s...
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Line 1, column 455, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
.... I find lack of solid evidences in the authors argument which weakens the authors poin...
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Line 1, column 782, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... enough capable of buying the new millet . Governmentss promotion would ensure tha...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'support'?
Suggestion: support
...ng the purchasing power, so how does it supports the point that new millet would be avai...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'support'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: support
...ng the purchasing power, so how does it supports the point that new millet would be avai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86666666667 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70265150973 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409195402299 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6443695751 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.611111111 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363098794593 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13974182733 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929577626598 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219954097101 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728174865941 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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