The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on 2 groups of worker :those aged from 18_30 and those aged 45_60 ,and shows factors affecting their work performance

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The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on 2 groups of worker :those aged from 18_30 and those aged 45_60 ,and shows factors affecting their work performance

The given layout chart shows the information about the work performance two age groups by different 10 factors.the data is calibrated in percentum. It is clear and cohrently represented.
It can be seen that , the work performance factor in team spirit 18_30aged group people was 60%.whereas, in age 45_60job security work performance were 40%.moreover,from 18_30competent boss,job satisfaction ,and money in work performance had been 50%,20%,and 70%respectively.
As far as trend was concerned that,from 18_30age group people work performance in relaxed working environment was 80%.furthermore, in age group 45 _60people in money work performance had 70%.however, in age 45_60age group people performance in team spirit,job security, and job satisfaction had been 60%,20%,and 50% respectively
Overall,it is evident from18_30 age group people work performance had more as comapre to 45_60 age group people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... group people work performance had more as comapre to 45_60 age group people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 33.7804878049 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 779.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 131.0 196.424390244 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9465648855 4.92477711251 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38312328216 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.65175876215 2.65546596893 138% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610687022901 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 150.892967033 43.030603864 351% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.75 112.824112599 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.75 22.9334400587 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.23603664747 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319924093076 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172609778613 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106139853226 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21756807024 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034122938624 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.2329268293 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 61.2550243902 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 10.3012195122 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.82 11.4140731707 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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