The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the letter, the author’s argument seems convincing at first, however, lack of assumptions lead me to question the credibility of the argument. The author should consider more various assumptions that might be based.
First, the author should consider the assumption that teenagers’ car accidents which occured in and around Centerville might not because of the teenagers’ maladroit driving but the other factors. For example, the other drivers might be one reason of the car accidents with teenagers. Since, the driving school is not affordable to many of the adult who attained drivers’ licence lately might not be fine drivers. In addition, the bad road condition of Centerville lead many drivers to make car accident which involve teenagers.
Second, another assumption should be considered on the highschool instruction, it might be more expensive than local driving school, since there are no driving teacher in highschool, it has to employ driving teacher from the off-campus, the author should consider the cost of mandatory program, also. Moreover, we can consider the driving school from the other town which might be more affordable.
Finally, the assumption should be considered on the number of parents who are not affordable to send their children to local driving school. A number of parents could nor represent the whole parents of the teenagers in Centerville. And also, it is too hasty for the author to judge that the most of the parents who are busy are also not affordable to send their children to the driving school. Some of the parents are not busy can teach their children how to drive while saving their budget.
In summary, the author’s argument seems unconving on many grounds becauses of the lack of assumptions. I believe that highschool mandatory program is not the only way that can teach teenagers effectively. People of the town should consider the road condition, the exact number of parents who cannot teach their children driving, the cost of the school program and the driving school in other town.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 334 350
No. of Characters: 1674 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.275 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.012 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.541 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.978 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.649 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
The school board in the town…
The school board in the town of centerville recived a letter raising concerns regarding the rise of automobile accidents involving teenagers in the town, the letter suggests that the lack of time and money to provide driving instruction by themselves or in driving schools is responsible for the problem. A mandatory driving school program in the school will help train students in driving safely and responsibly,however before we consider the suggestions of the author of this letter we must address certain questions that are not addressed in the letter.
Firstly, it is quite possible that teenagers are getting involved in accidents not beacause of a lack of proper training, perhaps there might be other reasons that might be responsible.For instance, a signification portion of the teenagers are addicted to mobile phones and can't stop using them while driving aswell, distracting them and hence causing accidents. Many teenagers also tend to be irresponsible by drinking and driving, which has also the leading cause of automobile accident in the country. Therefore it would be erroneous to assume that there is lack of training on part of the parents or driving instructions and perhaps it is the drivers themselves are being irresponsible, to address this problem awareness campains regarding Driving Under Influence and texing or using moblie phones need to be conducted.
Secondly, it is wrong to assume that majority of parents are unable to provide driving lessons to their wards personally or by sending them to a driving school. It is quite possible that more than half of the students have parents who are well trained and experienced drivers who own a cars and can allocate time or money to train their wards, and perharps a minorty of students come from families who are unable to do so. If that is the case then spending large amounts of resouces into a single madatory program for everyone would be inappropriate and many teenagers would perfer to not opt for the program and learn via other means, Thus there should programs specialized for teenager who cannot afford driving schools or have working parents who cannot dedicate time to train their wards.
Thirdly, we should also consider the possiblity that not also individuals would be able to effectively learn and pass from an integrated, mandatory course. DIffent people have diffrent learning rates and some might require more attention or supervison to be able to learn from the course, and that is someting the education system has critisized of time and time again that not all individuals are the same. Thus we should not judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree and let the teenagers choose if they wish to opt for the school's driving lessons program.
All in all, the authors idea of a single mandatory course seems unconvincing on many grounds and individuals should be allowed to learn at their own comfortable pace.In order to prove the point the author must submit for evidence that supports his or her argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'teachers'?
Suggestion: teachers
...ving school, since there are no driving teacher in highschool, it has to employ driving...
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...consider the cost of mandatory program, also. Moreover, we can consider the driving ...
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Line 7, column 396, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...d their children to the driving school. Some of the parents are not busy can teach their ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, moreover, second, so, while, as to, for example, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24550898204 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82893416581 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440119760479 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9010650449 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203478392735 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783748256296 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492258454473 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120601660604 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549430130947 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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