Some people think the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have contentious views on whether modern technology has been making people more or less sociable. Both schools of thought will be discussed in this essay, followed by my own point of view.
Advocates who believe that people are becoming more active in society due to technical innovations may have following reasons. First of all, inventions such as computers and Internet have been enabling people to make friends without geographical limitations. For example, it is the online platform that provided me the opportunity to get to know people from different countries, which enlarge my social network.. Secondly, modern technical devices such as cell phones have been increasing the interactions with other people. Compared with our ancestors people nowadays interact with others far more frequently.
On the other hand, people who claim that modern technology is make people losing sociability also have their justifications. Firstly, cutting-edge technology has been adversely affecting people’s connections in real life. It has been proven that more and more people, especially younger generations, are prone to participate in virtual world rather than forming relationships with people in society. What is more, modern technology is also making people less motivated to make deep connections with others. It is because using portable devices is more efficiently than having a face-to-face meeting. However, online chatting is not sensory as interpersonal communication, and therefore it is hard to form a strong and deep connection between people.
From my understanding, modern technology is a double-edged sword. Undoubtedly, it has been significantly expanding our life circle. However it is also making people lose their desires of connecting with others profoundly.
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Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, first of all, more or less, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70895522388 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09212885564 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608208955224 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3335622702 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.625 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336944475567 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120447668014 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118085599619 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23403726146 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938466719938 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.54 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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