According to the reading passage, the author mentions, nowadays with the huge progression of technology the paper medical records should be replaced by their electronic counterparts. The author provides three benefits of the electronic medical records. However, the professor opposes all of them.
First, the author states that the use of electronic records can reduce the recording costs include the material providing and storing facilities. The professor refutes the mentioned reasons by virtue of the doctors usually save the paper records as the backup information source. So, with the using the electronic records; in addition to the traditional costs, doctors should pay for the electronic devices too.
Second, the author argues that the electronic recording can prevent the potential errors in data saving. The professor claims, although in the electronic data the poor handwriting doesn’t mean, indeed the stored data should be entered to the computers by the humans and consequently, they maybe make mistake in reading or typing of the data.
At last the author states, with electronic recordings the medical researchers can easily access the rich database. Even though the process of data searching has facilitated but as the professor states, the researchers should take the permission for getting access to the patients’ data. She indicates that the United State law in this field is too strict and also patients maybe don’t let them get access to their private data.
In brief, the professor and the author give their contradicting ideas about the electronic recordings. The professor sheds light on the issue and argues that all the aforementioned reasons have radical critics. Consequently, with the above-mentioned reasons, we cannot be confident about the superiority of the electronic database over the traditional one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, may, second, so, in addition, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58098591549 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9172338648 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542253521127 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3138134034 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.214285714 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446669532066 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157421082551 0.0996497079465 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101340281049 0.0662205650399 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247898361589 0.162205337803 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084711269315 0.0443174109184 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.