Money is an essential factor for fulfilling various needs in life such as food, shelter and clothing. As such, people often find themselves spending money while obtaining material possessions; but unrestrained consumerism may lead to impoverishment, while destroying our nature, because of the overwhelming rubbish it produces. This essay states that over-consumerism tempts people to buy unnecessary products, which in turn empties their pockets, while destroying our environment because of the immense volume of waste it produces as people purchase products frequently.
First of all, many people buy innumerable useless products because of the increased aggressive materialism. Traders take advantage of the routine buying habits of consumers and make use of all platforms available such as advertisements in T.V, radio and internet to sell their goods. Moreover, companies that make devices like smart phones, computers and tablets often introduce latest versions of their gizmos periodically. As such, many spend most of their income on purchasing powerful devices and other fashion goods.
Additionally, banks and financial institutions offer credit services to its customers, which helps them to purchase commodities with loan. Since more options for getting extra finance is at disposal, they indulge in spending more money on non-essential items . This has not only led many to bankruptcy, as they could not repay their debt, but it also have resulted in environmental damage, because of the huge amount of rubbish it has created.
To put it in a nutshell, many choose to spend money rather than save it because it gives purchasing power which has resulted in shopaholism. Widespread consumerism persuades everyone to use their finances to secure redundant goods. This is by no means a positive progress, as it is hazardous to our nature because of the accumulation of junk. Thus, this essay states that money should be used wisely and limitless spending of it may lead to financial insecurity, all the while destroying our nature.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
...s available such as advertisements in T.V, radio and internet to sell their goods...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'introduce the latest'.
Suggestion: introduce the latest
...art phones, computers and tablets often introduce latest versions of their gizmos periodically. ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ending more money on non-essential items . This has not only led many to bankruptc...
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Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...could not repay their debt, but it also have resulted in environmental damage, becau...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48417721519 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01711887389 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598101265823 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5893381735 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.785714286 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199179993426 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658398908055 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447159684955 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118860342283 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414259047664 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.