In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence
Discussing how to balance earning money and caring their children, some parents consider this additional income as an important one for upbringing their children while others think that the absence of their parents can do harm to the development of the children. In my opinion, I totally agree with both parents go out to work earning money to support their families.
On the one hand, many families have both parents go out to work together earning income that they can give them a good living and I agree about that. Firstly, children have good educational environments. For examples, going to school which provides both the high-quality professional and a supportive environment. They have many opportunities to approach the global environment and learning vary the subject at inside or outside the school, or having a lot of activities useful to improve the skills of them. Thanks to helping children develop both physically and mentally. Moreover, children more independent than depend on their parent because their parents haven't much of the time for them. For instance, parents can teach them how to do housework, knowing how to take care of themselves instead of having parents make it all, owning they have aware and responsibility more than for themselves.
On the other hand, usually, the typical family have the husband to go out working, and his wife takes care of the children because this is one of the responsibilities of the mother and the wife with their family and children. Nowadays, social development means that having more evils especially the youngster is an easier enticement. Therefore parents need to spend more time to teach them to protect themselves from social issues. Furthermore, unlike families have both parents working together, these families can understand the strong points or weak points and can orient the suitable programs for their children's future life.
In my conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think children's life will better than if they have both parents going out to earn money with together. However, parents always need to balance between making money and teaching their children as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to vary'
Suggestion: to vary
...ach the global environment and learning vary the subject at inside or outside the sc...
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Line 2, column 660, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...d on their parent because their parents havent much of the time for them. For instance...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... the youngster is an easier enticement. Therefore parents need to spend more time to teac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16524216524 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70711645051 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7549068185 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.866666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354035910863 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129331854329 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754284534811 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242838064326 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389820080232 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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