People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do."
In today’s world pervaded by television shows and their notable celebrities, people watching those programmes have proclivity to be influenced by their extravagant lives .According to the following reason and my personal experiences,I firmly believe that people spend too much time on personal amusement rather doing things they are supposed to do .I feel this way for some reasons which I am going to explore in the following essay.
First of all, In this dazzling world, people are easily enticed by myriad of temptations which put them in indulgence and make them forget about their responsibilities. Let me cite an example which will bolster my aforementioned statement. A few months age, one of my friends decided to spend his savings on purchasing a laptop for his brother who was pursuing computer science course.But suddenly he changed his mind and squandered all his savings gambling in casinos which was really doleful.If he bought that laptop for his brother,he could have performed well in his practical paper.
Furthermore as people having ultra fast life style post their photographs with delicate food and beauty spot they went ,people having fixed salary try to flaunt off that similar lifestyle which make them unhappy and less satisfied and sometimes it make them run by precarious whims. Let me give a vivid example which can shed a light on this matter . My friend Joshua had a low paid job but he always tries to emulate his cousins life style who is a product manager in a multi-national company. To maintain this life style he fritters away money on luxurious things and drains out his salaries within half of a month and go to parents for money. In my opinion, he should work hard to get a promotion instead of showing off because this will make him happy and more satisfied.
By the way of conclusion, although experts put emphasis on that people should not do excessive work but the actual truth is that they do have too much personal entertainment and for which people evade the things they are supposed to do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, well, i feel, by the way, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9161849711 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72406101873 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606936416185 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.278098527 48.9658058833 235% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.1 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249742398992 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950069066221 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161407103623 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220015606916 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196888918248 0.0645574589148 305% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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