Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
Following cities' development, the difference between urban areas and rural areas was becoming very large. Therefore, many people discuss the family relationship between rural people and urban people. I belief people who live in urban areas are take better care of their families. I have three perspective about this question.
Primarily, urban areas have more recreation such as powerful network service, IMAX cinema and many of shows. However, these amusement are impossible appear in village. For example, my father always takes me and my brother to watch movie, and also we are all enjoy in movies. On the vacation we like to choose play video games together. We use these way to share free time and to eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family reunion. As I know my cousin used live in a small village, but now he followed my uncle to live in city. When my uncle went to cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never watch the movie in the cinema. And then he go to the cinema once a week with my uncle. Before that my cousin just have little talk with my uncle, but after he had been loved movie. He told all of his things to my uncle. Movie changed their relationship. Obviously, people live in urban areas take better care of their family.
Secondly, working in the city have more opportunity earn more money, in this case they can provide more comfortable living conditions for their family. As far as I know, children who studying in rural areas just can get a low quality education. For example, once I carry on an activity which is teaching rural children homework. When I went there, I found these children can not finish easy math problem, which is my brother can finish quickly. These children told me their biggest dream is to have a library, so that they can find many books to learn by themselves. However these children's parents most are farmer or construction worker. Their parents only can afford cheap education for them, but as my brother my parents let him went to the best primary school in my town. We can obtain high level education because of our parents are a company leader. Consequently, people lived in urban areas can give good quality of life for their family, so urban people can take better care of their family.
In conclusion, urban people absolutely can take better care of their family.
Following cities’ development, the difference between urban areas and rural areas was becoming very large. Therefore, many people discuss the family relationship between rural people and urban people. I belief people who live in urban areas are take better care of their families. I have three perspective about this question.
Primarily, urban areas have more recreation such as powerful network service, IMAX cinema and many of shows. However, these amusement are impossible appear in village. For example, my father always takes me and my brother to watch movie, and also we are all enjoy in movies. On the vacation we like to choose play video games together. We use these way to share free time and to eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family reunion. As I know my cousin used live in a small village, but now he followed my uncle to live in city. When my uncle went to cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never watch the movie in the cinema. And then he go to the cinema once a week with my uncle. Before that my cousin just have little talk with my uncle, but after he had been loved movie. He told all of his things to my uncle. Movie changed their relationship. Obviously, people live in urban areas take better care of their family.
Secondly, working in the city have more opportunity earn more money, in this case they can provide more comfortable living conditions for their family. As far as I know, children who studying in rural areas just can get a low quality education. For example, once I carry on an activity which is teaching rural children homework. When I went there, I found these children can not finish easy math problem, which is my brother can finish quickly. These children told me their biggest dream is to have a library, so that they can find many books to learn by themselves. However these children’s parents most are farmer or construction worker. Their parents only can afford cheap education for them, but as my brother my parents let him went to the best primary school in my town. We can obtain high level education because of our parents are a company leader. Consequently, people lived in urban areas can give good quality of life for their family, so urban people can take better care of their family.
In conclusion, urban people absolutely can take better care of their family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...of their families. Following cities development, the difference between urb...
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Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: BELIEF_BELIEVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'believe' (verb) instead of belief (noun)?
Suggestion: believe
...etween rural people and urban people. I belief people who live in urban areas are take...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this amusement' or 'these amusements'?
Suggestion: this amusement; these amusements
...IMAX cinema and many of shows. However, these amusement are impossible appear in village. For e...
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Line 9, column 310, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to play'
Suggestion: to play
...vies. On the vacation we like to choose play video games together. We use these way ...
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Line 9, column 344, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
...hoose play video games together. We use these way to share free time and to eases our str...
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Line 9, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...e free time and to eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently stren...
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Line 9, column 418, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
...o eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family r...
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Line 9, column 444, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...ition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family reunion. As I know my cousin...
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Line 9, column 628, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...t to cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never w...
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Line 9, column 631, Rule ID: PERS_PRONOUN_AGREEMENT_SENT_START[5]
Message: Use third-person verb with 'He': 'is' or 'was'.
Suggestion: is; was
...o cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never watch ...
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Line 9, column 669, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...e were very surprised, because he never watch the movie in the cinema. And then he go...
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Line 9, column 712, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...ch the movie in the cinema. And then he go to the cinema once a week with my uncle...
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Line 13, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y earn more money, in this case they can provide more comfortable living conditio...
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Line 13, column 569, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...find many books to learn by themselves. However these childrens parents most are farmer...
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Line 22, column 209, Rule ID: BELIEF_BELIEVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'believe' (verb) instead of belief (noun)?
Suggestion: believe
...etween rural people and urban people. I belief people who live in urban areas are take...
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Line 24, column 119, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this amusement' or 'these amusements'?
Suggestion: this amusement; these amusements
...IMAX cinema and many of shows. However, these amusement are impossible appear in village. For e...
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Line 24, column 310, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to play'
Suggestion: to play
...vies. On the vacation we like to choose play video games together. We use these way ...
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Line 24, column 344, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
...hoose play video games together. We use these way to share free time and to eases our str...
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Line 24, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...e free time and to eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently stren...
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Line 24, column 418, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
...o eases our strain. In addition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family r...
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Line 24, column 444, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...ition I think these way are excellently strengthen our family reunion. As I know my cousin...
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Line 24, column 628, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...t to cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never w...
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Line 24, column 631, Rule ID: PERS_PRONOUN_AGREEMENT_SENT_START[5]
Message: Use third-person verb with 'He': 'is' or 'was'.
Suggestion: is; was
...o cinema with him for the first time.He were very surprised, because he never watch ...
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Line 24, column 669, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...e were very surprised, because he never watch the movie in the cinema. And then he go...
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Line 24, column 712, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...ch the movie in the cinema. And then he go to the cinema once a week with my uncle...
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Line 28, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y earn more money, in this case they can provide more comfortable living conditio...
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Line 28, column 569, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...find many books to learn by themselves. However these children's parents most are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 126.0 43.0788530466 292% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4170.0 1977.66487455 211% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 870.0 407.700716846 213% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79310344828 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.43100012958 4.48103885553 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44307255609 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.258620689655 0.524837075471 49% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1346.4 618.680645161 218% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 3.51792114695 398% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 56.0 20.6003584229 272% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.030432725 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4642857143 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5357142857 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51785714286 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 31.0 11.8709677419 261% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 20.0 4.88709677419 409% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419938717495 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117223922177 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170157107469 0.0737576698707 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343635442185 0.150856017488 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.246376106155 0.0645574589148 382% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.98 8.01818996416 75% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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