In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause.
In recent years, when the manufacturing industry has developed highly, many kind of modern machines are made to replace the task of people at home and at work. Thus, they will help more spare time. For this movement, this will bring benefits and also cause the problems.
On the one hand, the replacement is able to offer positive points. Firstly, many kind of machine such as a dishwasher, a vacuum cleaner, a washing machine can help people to do housework. As a result, a housewife or individuals who have heavy workload at their companies all day have just spent a little time to clean and tidy places and things. Therefore, they have free time to hang out with their friends to relax or to do the gym for physical exercise. Like to me, using machines to wash clothes, clean the floor, it result that I have more time to teach my child and help him to do homework. Besides that, machines can perform many of the tasks of in business. With computers we can do our works easily. For instance, computers can analyze a massive amount of data extremely exactly in a single second. In accountancy, all reports can be done on time and corrected by the support of machines.
On the other hand, there are some detrimental impacts of machines. Initially, people depending on machines and muscle activities are less and less and the risks of health disorders will increase. So, doing housework seems to do physical exercise and be more useful for our health. Moreover, we become lazier and fatter because machines can do everything. For example, teenagers are unknown how to do housework by themselves, and they can do nothing without machines. In studying, children can use computers to do their exercises or copy materials from anyone with a software in computer. In business, when machines are broken, people are unable to do anything to finish their works. This will causes many serious problems about deadline of reports to manage business.
In conclusion, the development of technology and the appearance of modern machines make our life more comfortable and convenient. We have more free time for our families and our works can be handled easily. However, we should use machines reasonably. Sometimes we do something by ourselves so that we can solve anything in any hard circumstance without machines and keep us not be lazy in thinking and doing exercises to help our heath better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...acturing industry has developed highly, many kind of modern machines are made to replace ...
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Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...able to offer positive points. Firstly, many kind of machine such as a dishwasher, a vacu...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'results'?
Suggestion: results
...es to wash clothes, clean the floor, it result that I have more time to teach my child...
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Line 5, column 694, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...ything to finish their works. This will causes many serious problems about deadline of...
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Line 5, column 741, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'reports managing'.
Suggestion: reports managing
...many serious problems about deadline of reports to manage business. In conclusion, the develo...
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Line 7, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be lazy in thinking and doing exercises to help our heath better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86519607843 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66880928736 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531862745098 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8117787104 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7083333333 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.20833333333 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368936624052 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100946782614 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673349249495 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255498772085 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105134384815 0.056905535591 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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