in the past, most of parents made a decision for their child but now young people make better decisions about their lives.
These days making a decision has become more important than past. I am of the opionion that young people was dependent on their parents to make decision in the past, but today young people are more able to make decision about their own lives. I think this way for two main reasons which, I would explore in the following essay.
The first reason which should be pointed out here is that advent of technology makes young people more independent because not only do they have to access to many helpful resources such as the internet, but also they have more knowledge about their lives in comparison to the last generations. My brother is a case in point, when was finishing the college, my father give him a piece of advise to select the civil-engineering as a field of study, but he did not accept because my brother had searched in the internet and thought that computer-based fields would be more burgeoning in the future, therefore, he select this field for study. As my brother said, now most of civil-engineers are searching for a job due to a dramatic reccession in Iran.
The other subtle point which deserves some words is that now people spend most their time without family, so families today are not aware of youngs' personalities. To that, it is more likely that decisions which has made by parents whould lead to bad consequences. For example, when I wanted to marry, I searched a lot to find an appropriate person who can make me relaxed, so I should make this important decision by myself because the only person who is aware of my personality completely is me. Finally, i find a person with similar personality, and now we are prosperous.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that youngs people decide more independently in comparison to the last generation because not only have youngs better resource of information for recieving advise such as internet , but also the parent are not aware of youngs' personality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80239520958 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79841790901 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535928143713 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.0630284954 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.818181818 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3636363636 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379430944362 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145245442623 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139211369668 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241871770067 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140708521127 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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