Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there is a different view of the issue about whether the relatives are more separating than before. Depending on personal experiences and beliefs, we may find that some people really think the relationship is worse than the past, while other holds the different attitude that it does not have any change. As far as I concerned, I believe the extended family is not less important. The following discussion will explore my view.
Indeed, many people will feel they are reducing to contact with their relatives such as cousins or aunts in now. Every Chinese new year in the past, the whole family will come together to have a big meal and give some luck money for every child as the blessing to next year. During this period, a family will have many activities but they would move together. However, people have more and more choices than before in recent new years. Most of them may not get together to enjoy the new year, instead, they may choose to take a trip to different countries. Therefore, it is true that many people will feel the relationship is going to worse because they do not meet anymore even when the Chinese new year.
On the other hand, although the extended family is less to meet in the normal time, with the development of technology, people are often to use different ways to connect with one another. For example, while I am little to meet with my cousins, I got a lot of help from my cousins in the past year when I graduated from college and also in finding the job. During the time when my cousins help me to find the job, we did not see each other. All communication and information delivery is through the internet. Moreover, by this event, we become more familiar with each other. Thus, that the relatives are not important than in the past seems not to be true.
In fact, the members of the family are linked by the blood, which means if there are no other factors such as the severe fight or something that could totally beak the emotion between members, it is impossible family will gradually become unimportant. A family may be true that will less communicate, but when the member in a family needs the help, the other members still will stand out for help. This point is unquestionable.
In conclusion, despite the fact that sometimes the family is few to contact, there are still many other factors which will make us keep the important relationship. Therefore, we cannot presumptuously believe the statement of the topic.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...he job. During the time when my cousins help me to find the job, we did not see each other. All...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6880733945 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50916173286 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497706422018 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0546785213 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147845104611 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459310829839 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03722641155 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856967262766 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245444138956 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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